what's about this beginning to my story?1875, the government of Ropia city was established, no one had believed this day would come. After 900 years of settling in Egypt's lands. The residents' economic situation deteriorated; their hopes hadn't been seen on the horizon any more. The flag that symbolized their freedom was put at half mast, being sullied with blood stains, those which belonged to the soldiers who had been fighting for years to get it to flutter proudly. Raising their heads, asking the merciful god to lead them to victory, they expected the savior to fall from the skies, they portrayed him as a godlike man, a sort of guy that could captivate the most beautiful lady in the planet by a wink. They definitely wouldn't have thought it was me, even if the Load himself had said it explicitly. They chose a man called "Kenney" instead, his appearance looked almost like they had described their savior would be. His body shape was curved in a way that showed up his strength, but later, he turned out to be an arrogant boastful person. Twenty years later, 1895, times were just getting rough in Ropia city. Many families lived under the poverty line, the food was picked off the ground, only the lucky ones were able to eat what the rich families had dumped in the garbage. A digestive transmitted disease was the common issue that the government had to deal with, but they all knew it was just the beginning …
I'd be glad if you help me finding a title to this story !
BTW, how's my English ?
Posted by darkbunnyess
its good (ur english) your story lacks deatials and a main character explain more!! -plz don't think i'm harsh
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