This is my college application essay, what are my chances of getting into colleges?I would like to share with you something about my current medical situation. Ordinarily I would not do so, as I am an intensely private person, but I now accept that my physical limitations have quite possibly impacted my high school performance in a negative manner, and I feel that it is only fair that you have this information. Therefore, I am reluctantly going to allow access to information that I would never, otherwise, speak of.
For the past several years, I have been afflicted by a physical situation that has sometimes interfered with my ability to focus, both in the classroom and out. I do not wish to be too specific about the symptoms of my disease, except to say that they are digestive in nature and sometimes require me to spend long periods of time in the Ladies' Room. Despite my terrible discomfort, I refused to accept that there might be something wrong with me, and would not seek treatment. I know now that I should have been less determined to suffer in silence and more willing to accept help. Finally, my parents insisted on bringing the matter to the attention of a physician. I was tested, over a period of several weeks, for colon cancer, Crohn's Disease, intestinal obstructions, diverticulitis, ulcerative colitis, gastroesophageal reflux disease, Barrett's esophagus, Heliocobacter pylori (commonly known as ulcer), celiac sprue (commonly known as wheat allergy), lactose intolerance, gallstones, bile duct stones, sclerosing cholangitis (the narrowing of the bile ducts), "Sphincter of Oddi" dysfunction and pancreatitis. You can imagine how relieved I was to learn that I had none of these terrible diseases.
Finally, I received the diagnosis of Irritable Bowel Syndrome (IBS).
This article is about a functional disorder. For bowel inflammation, see Inflammatory bowel disease.
Irritable bowel syndrome
Classification and external resources
ICD-10 K58.
ICD-9 564.1
DiseasesDB 30638
MedlinePlus 000246
eMedicine med/1190
MeSH D043183
Irritable bowel syndrome (IBS or spastic colon) is a diagnosis of exclusion. It is a functional bowel disorder characterized by chronic abdominal pain, discomfort, bloating, and alteration of bowel habits in the absence of any detectable organic cause.[1] In some cases, the symptoms are relieved by bowel movements.[2] Diarrhea or constipation may predominate, or they may alternate (classified as IBS-D, IBS-C or IBS-A, respectively). IBS may begin after an infection (post-infectious, IBS-PI), a stressful life event, or onset of maturity without any other medical indicators.
Although there is no cure for IBS, there are treatments that attempt to relieve symptoms, including dietary adjustments, medication and psychological interventions. Patient education and a good doctor-patient relationship are also important.[2]
Several conditions may present as IBS including coeliac disease, fructose malabsorption,[3] mild infections, parasitic infections like giardiasis,[4] several inflammatory bowel diseases, functional chronic constipation, and chronic functional abdominal pain. In IBS, routine clinical tests yield no abnormalities, although the bowels may be more sensitive to certain stimuli, such as balloon insufflation testing. The exact cause of IBS is unknown. The most common theory is that IBS is a disorder of the interaction between the brain and the gastrointestinal tract, although there may also be abnormalities in the gut flora or the immune system.[5][6]
IBS does not lead to more serious conditions in most patients.[7][8][9][10][11] However, it is a source of chronic pain, fatigue, and other symptoms and contributes to work absenteeism.[12][13] Researchers have reported that the high prevalence of IBS,[14][15][16] in conjunction with increased costs, produces a disease with a high societal cost.[17] It is also regarded as a chronic illness and can dramatically affect the quality of a sufferer's life.
Contents
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* 1 Classification
* 2 Symptoms
* 3 Causes
o 3.1 Active infections
* 4 Diagnosis
o 4.1 Differential diagnosis
o 4.2 Misdiagnosis
o 4.3 Comorbidities
* 5 Management
o 5.1 Diet
o 5.2 Medication
o 5.3 Psychotherapy
o 5.4 Alternative medicine
* 6 Epidemiology
* 7 History
* 8 Economics
* 9 Research
* 10 See also
* 11 References
* 12 External links
Posted by leslie g
I don't get it, is this just a portion of your essay or the entire thing? because if it is the entire thing then i would suggest you go to a writing center at your local school or teacher and have them help you determine what is best to include in your admissions essay.
Posted by Boredxoxoxox
Your college essay should be happy, thats what my teacher told me at least
Posted by Nick
Honestly, I doubt any good colleges want to hear about your poop problems.
Even so the topic sentence was pretty awful. You don't hook somebody in by saying I'm going to explain something to you. You need to explain the relevenace of your article. I'd also put a little humor in it. Maybe along the lines of "Through many years of my life I have suffered through a rather 'stinky' situation"
Also instead of explaining details the essay became more of a list. Explaining, other digestion problems. You don't want to make a list in an important essay, especially when that doesn't pertain specifiaclly to what your essay is about.
Finally, it is really short. I'm not to sure how long the college essay is supposed to be but you didn't include much information, and your essay was roughly about a half a page before you copyed and pasted an article (which correct me if i'm wrong looks like its from wikipedia, which proffessors HATE!!!)
I will commend you on your vocabulary however, you had strong word choice, but unfortunetaly outside of highschool, you can't fool teachers as easily with big words. I'd put a little more thought into this essay, and maybe not write about poop, then you should do a lot better!
Posted by H
No one can tell you your chances of getting into a university...we don't know you, your grades, your accomplishments...and we can't read minds.
You'll have to talk to your college adviser...and I suggest you take this essay to your English teacher.
It's not really an essay unless you've been told to write a certain number of words. You aren't telling them about IBS or how it affects you...and you need to if you're going to talk about it. Giving them a copy/paste of some article you found on a website is ridiculous. Not only is it pointless because they cannot look up the classification, symptoms, etc in the article or see the entire article, but you haven't cited it in MLA or APA format. It shows a great lack of English composition and writing skills. As a senior, you should know how to write an essay and cite sources....and this does not show that.
Tell them how your condition affects you and your studies. Tell them your concerns. You don't have to go through all the things you were tested for. As a university admissions adviser, if I saw this "essay" come across my desk, it would be a huge mark against you. If you got stellar grades or good grades in English, writing, etc, I would be skeptical.
Posted by tony ganachi
Mr. Troll, I must say you are a very persistent rascal. You have posted this same question about five other times. I think its about time you stop.
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